White Echoes

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We dance barefoot across frozen waters

Feverish tears burning on winter cheeks

Our bodies splintered in neat rows of crimson

lacing scarlet into icy lakes and tracing sadness into pale sky

White echoes haunting the soundless storm

Our feet glitter and blaze on glacial surface

We clutch each other’s hands and listen to our heat

as we slowly melt into the echoes

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4 thoughts on “White Echoes

  1. My favorite lines, were the center two:

    “lacing scarlet into icy lakes and tracing sadness into pale sky
    White echoes haunting the soundless storm”

    “White Echoes” reminds me of the lyrics to my favorite Shearwater song, “Hidden Lakes”.

    Here’s a link to the video – https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZbPLy4-OgAw

    “Hidden Lakes”
    by Shearwater

    Gone from the house
    to the snows
    like a wandering light
    you send a last balloon
    to the solemn light
    of the moon’s eye

    Over the fields
    and the arcs of the radial lines
    that bind the waking world
    to the hidden life
    of the empire
    that sleeps in the frozen lakes
    and moors in the darkened bays
    and glows in the golden rays
    and dreams of us

    That moves
    without sound
    through the air
    through the ground
    and that streams through each break
    carved in the line
    and dreams of us

  2. I think these lines summarize it all:

    “We dance barefoot across frozen waters
    as we slowly melt into the echoes”

    Those are the first and last lines. Passionate!

  3. I agree with Plathinson. Like all written work the opening and closing of a piece is so important and both are powerful images that open and close the poem beautifully. From what I have read here ‘passionate’ is a word that seems to sum you up. I look forward to reading more. Your comments about Anorexia Nervosa were interesting as I came across many young people with various problems during my time as a teacher. One thing I that always did was encourage them to write down their feelings in whatever form they chose. It was a tremendously cathartic process for them and always helped with the progress towards tackling the problem.

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